Tuesday, July 20, 2010
PZ: Have the new media changed our lives for the better?
New media has granted users to have greater accessibility to wider range of knowledge. Different people has their different kinds experiences and also unique set of ideas about certain topic. With the advantageous tool of new media in hand, such ideas are easily distributed and some might be useful. For example, new media such as Facebook(which has the world's second highest network users per day) and Youtube( which has the world's second highest network users perday) allow people to share their views and experiences of different topics to people at the other end of the pole. Such knowledge shared by different individuals might come in handy. There was a case whereby a baby was safely delivered by following the instructions given from the videos posted on Youtube when the father of the child failed to send his wife to the hospital on time. Hence, new media has slowly gain its status of being an imperative tool as various informations can be gathered with its help, efficiently and effectively.
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Format is more or less there, but possibly more explanation can be done. And also, there seems to be grammatical issues.
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ReplyDeleteBoth opposing view and rebuttal weren't included, but the sv's fine (: I think you've got to link the 'imperative tool' point back to the question about it changing our lives for the better, though, as your link states new media's growing importance in our lives, instead of how it improves our lives.
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For example, new media such as Facebook(which has the world's second highest network users per day) and Youtube( which has the world's second highest network users perday) allow people to share their views and experiences of different topics to people at the other end of the pole.
ReplyDeleteit would help your argument if your consciously link your example to your understanding of New Media: which functions in Youtube and Facebook allow for such sharing?
There was a case whereby a baby was safely delivered by following the instructions given from the videos posted on Youtube when the father of the child failed to send his wife to the hospital on time.
This is interesting but may sound a little sensational. If you use surprising egs like this, be sure to be as factual as possible ie. give me details like where and when it happened. Also, what sort of videos were posted? "How to deliver a baby?" Or merely sharing of similar birthing methods from other users?
Agree with the comments above.
As Pinghao has mentioned, your link needs to be as strong as your topic sentence, if not more. keep your point in mind instead of veering off-course.